把我改作文:Greatchangesinmyhometown
个位英语高手给个分数,然后把我改一下,本人高三(不好意思水平很烂,在冲刺阶段,英语更加要充实)
Greatchangesinmyhometown
IrememberwhenIwasachild,myhometownwasonlyasmallcity,Andthefieldswerenotfarfrommyhome.Soifyouwanttihaveagoodbreath,youcouldwalktothatfieldsforhavingagoodbreath.
Now,about15yearsago,myhometownhasgreatchanges.Forexample:everyfieldswerechangedintothebigbuildings,andtherearemoreandmorecarsacrossonthestreethereandthere.Butifyouwanttorelaxandhaveagoodbreath,you’dbettertofindthefieldsfromthecityedge..
I’mpleasedtohavethisdevelopedhometown,butI’llneverforgetthehomewhichwascleanandbeautbeforethen.
一定要先给个分数,我估一下我月考的分数!谢谢!
总分就是15分!